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She was just four years old
kicking her feet
harder and harder,
as the swingset creaked
and cracked
She finally reached the peak,
jumped off,
and said,
"Mama, I'm gonna fly."
and so she did;
three feet into the air,
sticking the landing
like a gymnast

And I wonder everyday
if those were the same words
she muttered
before jumping off that bridge,
unable to remember,
you only fly for a little while.
Suicide is not the answer, you only fly for a little while. And unlike the swing set, you won't be sticking the landing. I'm here for any and all of you. :heart:

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Given 2014-11-17
You only fly for a little while by Tangled-Tales is poignant and succinct, clearly expressing its message without ever stating it. ( Featured by SingingFlames )
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puddlethecat Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Just too beautiful for words (thats ironic) ! <3 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thanks darlin'! Stay fab! :heart:
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MiheiGawi Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It would be pointless to leave a comment here,
because again, I'm absolutely speechless....

Oh, well, poignant is a really good word to use here Heart 
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU SO MUCH :D Awe you are too sweet. <3
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:iconla-morgana:
La-Morgana Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2014  Student Writer
Wow, poignant describes this perfectly. This is beautiful
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much, sweetie! You are the best. :)
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Mossstripel Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2014
I'm trying to remember that, but just a moment of flying seems better than a life on the ground sometimes. Anyway, wonderful poem - short and touching. :) It makes me think of the song lyrics "I've been having this dream that we can fly, So maybe if we never wake up, we can see the sky."
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ohh, beautiful but sad lyrics. Stay wonderful dearie! Glad you enjoyed it! :hug:
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Chrissi-queen Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Oh.
My.
God.


THIS IS PERFECT!!
Well deserved DD~!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thank you so much! You are too sweet! Have a fab day!
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:iconkokorucat:
KokoruCat Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
this is clever good job!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU SWEETIE! :D
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RandomPerson9393 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014   Digital Artist
WOW. I DO NOT LIKE IT.



I LOVE IT!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe :hug: You are a lil' ray of sunshine!
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RandomPerson9393 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014   Digital Artist
Well it's so poetic like combining art and poetry and ambitions and suicide and all that :O makes me happy cry 
T_T
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MusicAddict26 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DD!
This was beautifully written and just plain amazing!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe you are so beautiful and so sweet!!!! :D
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Tehmongs Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Suicide is not the answer. But during that brief moment of flight, it always seems like everything will be alright, that you'll be delivered from a life of suffering and turmoil.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You captured my message exactly.
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XxgreenninjaxX1 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
nice i love it great job i really like it i have a few poems but they arnt that good and i really love ur poem
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
AWE THANKS FOR READING AND COMMENTING SUNSHINE! :)
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XxgreenninjaxX1 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
OF COURSE U ARE A WONDERFUL WRITER AND I ENJOY UR WORK KEEP IT UP UR AMAZING!! Neko Emoji-17 (Happy) [V1] 
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TheAntiqueClock Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting! I saw another piece of writing with a similar theme like the one shown here, and it just proves to me even more of what wonderful writers you all are. I have to say, it's people like you that changes my life. Thank you for writing this!

This was the deviation that reminded me of this one ---> rei-kei.deviantart.com/art/2-S…
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you so much! I really am not one to change lives, but it makes me happy that you think so!!! I shall check out that deviation! :D
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ShadowUmbreon84 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Congrats on the DD~! Heart Heart 

This was absolutely AMAZING.

I loved this~! ^^Heart Heart 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe oh my you are too sweet! :heart: You are so so kind!
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ShadowUmbreon84 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Aw thanks! 

I don't get the very often Sweating a little... 
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WizardHowl10001 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014
Congrats on the DD, you deserve it! :heart:
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thanks sunshine! You are splendid! :D
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RainbowPlatypus27 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amazingly written!
It says so much, yet so little at the same time.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you! I try!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you so so much! :D <3
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deviantartchiz Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014
I can't even out my comment into words. Despite its length, your poem is so perfectly executed that I don't have anything else to say. Simply wonderful!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
AW YOU ARE TOO FAB AW HUGGING YOU SO MUCH!!! :)
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deviantartchiz Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014
hug APH Prussia tackle hug Hug 2 Bro hug Hug Hug 
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:iconzalaria:
Zalaria Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Student General Artist
This is just perfect... wow. <3
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thanks darling! <3
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angelicroses37 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
...Whoa. :O
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU SO MUCH SWEETIE! :D
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angelicroses37 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
:)
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XxFlameFrost101xX Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I want to comment on this, but I don't know what to say. 

This is says such a lot, although it isnt very long.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you! Just the fact you read it is so wonderful!
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XxFlameFrost101xX Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:aww: :heart:
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Lexxylyric Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014
Wonderful...very well written.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thanks dearie! Stay splendid!
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Justforalittlewhile Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this so much! I can't tell you how much this relates to me
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe well I hope you are doing okay! Always message me if you need anything! :hug:
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:iconjustforalittlewhile:
Justforalittlewhile Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm doing better =) Okay! And you too!!! :hug:
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Indiana-Time-Rider Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014
That is so touching! It almost made me cry! :''( Congrats on such a good piece!
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