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Maybe we should stop wishing on shooting stars,
birthday candles,
and dandelions
to bring our muttered words to life

For eighteen years later,
we still close our eyes;
whispering words of yearning at a golden object,
demolishing a crimson flame,
and emitting white specks into the lucent air

But maybe we shouldn't
For these wishes we make for countless years
Serve as reminders:
That no one in life has everything,
But at least we have something

Even if it's just an intangible sentence
muttered under our ardent breath
What do wishes actually prove?
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:iconbeth-beththecolorful:
Beth-BethTheColorful Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I really do think I'm actually in love with you and that eloquent mind of yours. 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha oh my thanks! >.<
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DebuNeko98 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely poem :heart:
I can see that you're the type who writes about both facts and emotions from human nature. I like that.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU SO MUCH! :D Glad you enjoyed it!
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MidnightTiger8140 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think the act of making or stating a wish helps give more concrete form to something that would be otherwise a vague interest or desire.
At the same time, though, only wishing and not doing much more about it won't bring about much.

But sometimes, even having the courage and hope to wish for something can be invaluable.
(For a while, I stopped making wishes because I was afraid of wishing for something that wasn't possible, and then being disappointed when it didn't come true.)

I like how you were able to capture both sides of the wish - how it is, in a sense, somewhat impractical, and yet is still something incredibly important at times.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
YES YES YES. YOU UNDERSTAND!! Thank you! :)
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mashabraslavsky Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Wonderful poem!
I feel wishes are soul's aspirations, the goals that one aspires to reach, with the hope of one day to reach them...
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah buddy!!
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent! Your poems have messages...beautiful
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you think so! :D
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shep4life Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I do I do
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MysticDeviant Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very well written and I often wonder this myself. Well Done ^.^
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU :)
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MysticDeviant Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome :D
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LyraGrindoffe Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013
This describes the way i wish, its beautiful. You are a gifted poet.
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Aragorn2001 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
No kidding!!!! You're amazing!!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awww, thanks! :)
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LyraGrindoffe Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
Your welcome
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AnimeGero Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
Dang... that jsut bitter sweet... but beautiful!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS :D
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xxatouchofrostxx Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very true <3 Good job~!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS! :D Glad you think so!
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xxatouchofrostxx Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome~ :hug:
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jul320 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
absolutely fantasmal (I made up that word)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thanks! <3 I like the word, too.
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Nortstar Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013
it was really great ^^ pretty work :)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS <3
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Nortstar Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
you are welcome :hug:
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Miyuki3769 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I really like this poem, I really do ^^ I think that wishes prove that you still have hope for a goal that you have set in mind. It's not the dandelions or the shooting stars that are making the wishes come true. It is our own effort that we put forward to making the wish come true.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
YES YES YES. You get it! And thanks! <3
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Miyuki3769 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome :love:
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DiegoTomasu Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Someone doesn't have a Christmas spirit! Its okay though. I never had one to begin with. Hippocratic level is over 9000.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The end brings my spirit out, don't worry. :)
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wolfloversas Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
When I started reading, I was ready to argue about how come I can't wish on all those? Now I'm just... meh. Gosh darn your poems, no argument can be made anymore.

Anyways, good job with this one. ^^
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, it's a trap! ;) AND THANKS :D
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:iconwolfloversas:
wolfloversas Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your poems are all traps! Maybe I should stay away from them?
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Heehee, nope! There are always two sides! ;) KEEP ON COMING! :D
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wolfloversas Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:) I will, I will.
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kar4all Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013
I liked it, very well written. You are very talented (sorry; when something is well written I can't help but add my own thoughts about the topic lol *comment before*)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No, it is fine! I love personal input! And THANKS! :D
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kar4all Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013
Yet wishes may be yearnings that reminds us we don't have everything is also shows we still hope and hope in a soul is something that if extinguished forever destroys the soul itself. They flame of hope is precious and lies inside everyone, that is what every birthday shows...
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
YES <3
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KitsuYuu Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I like it ^ u ^ ! It's really lovely and well written, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it! :))
Good job!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS :D
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KitsuYuu Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
you're welcomee ! ((:
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AsakoBunny Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent point and very well written, too. :)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS :D
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AsakoBunny Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome~!
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Arthur55623 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
BRAVO!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! <3
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