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I wish
my veins
of ocean blue
flowed not just
to my heart,
but to
yours too.
This is REALLY short, sorry about that. Not too much to read. Might edit this one some more, we shall see I guess. FEEDBACK PLEASE! :D
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:iconhammer777:
hammer777 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2014
blood transfusion
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So literal.
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narutogirl132 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
the picture i made is here: narutogirl132.deviantart.com/a… ummmm yeah IM SO SORRY BECAUSE I DIDN;T POST IT FOR SO LONG!!!!! *tears* but  hope you like it!
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TGA-Tsurugi Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Such amazing visions of people intertwined  by their vines *A* wow!!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha I think you meant veins but yes yayaya! ;D
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:icontga-tsurugi:
TGA-Tsurugi Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
bahahah whoops! Was tired when I read these :lmao:
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahhaa, go figure. JUST KIDDING THANK YOU SO MUCH YO.
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TGA-Tsurugi Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
XDD Hahaha no problem! This one inspired me fo sho *v*
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw yay :)
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mezzalune Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Professional Filmographer
Short and sweet :)
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
;D
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noelmaghathephoto Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014   Photographer
I dedicate this to ma baabay TGA-Tsurugi <3 luh ya boo


This is amazing as always!!!q$%^%$$^&%^&$%^#$
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awwwww yayaya :heart:
You two the cayutest. :)

AND THANK YOU, YOU SO SWEET! <33
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noelmaghathephoto Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014   Photographer
<3 
U r perfect!!! 
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
NO YOU. :hug:
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:iconnortstar:
Nortstar Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014
it is really pretty :)
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS! <3
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openskyline Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Music "If I could write you a song to make you -fall in love, I would already have you up under my arms..." Music Austria emote 
Does anyone remember the song "Cooler than Me"? This reminds me  of this, in a disconected way.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahha, I do remember that! I loved that song, tbh >.< But yes, now that you say that...... haha.
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openskyline Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I loved it too, although I was about 9 at it's most popualr point. It seems everyone has forgotten it now. <3
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
True life! :/
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Turtles-n-Things Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Making it short makes it more powerful, and so beautiful
 la in love 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Heeheee thanks!! <3
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:iconmarybalderrama:
MaryBalderrama Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014   General Artist
This is really lovely.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!!! :)
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dead-rotten-bitch Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I wish I could do this for that person in my life, but he won't let me.
Thank you for writing this, it's perfect…
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw no dear, thanks for reading!
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dead-rotten-bitch Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
It was my pleasure, believe me ^-^'
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LightsOnLuna Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Short, yes, but no less beautiful
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU DEAR!! :heart:
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Kcat6 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014
I like how you can see different meanings within the poem...I can see it either as someone wanting to share their feelings with another person, but also it could be warming them up with their blood, or trying to revive someone from the dead. Like if someone was deceased, and you wished that their blood could still flow by using yours.

Anyway anyway, as for feedback I guess I don't really like the line "of ocean blue." I don't think it adds much to the poem besides a rhyme, which isn't really needed. It also doesn't really seem to fit in with the idea of the poem - if your veins are cold and blue, then why would you want to share that kind of sad feeling with another person?

Well, that's just my take. But I do like the poem :)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Okay!! Thank you for the feedback and other interpretation! I love hearing from people! :heart:
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Iredescent Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ocean might have been meant as a metaphor; one can travel the ocean from one place to another, so if they are 'connected', then they will be together.  I'm only guessing, anyway..
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Nyuuh Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014
The rhymes add some cute side to the poem. Nice work, once again!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU! :D
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014
Don't touch it!!!!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
HAHA ;P
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thebookthief121 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i love the little rhyme! i love all of your poetry, even the little ones :)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thanks! Good to hear! :)
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DRA3X Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Student General Artist
holy hell must have been one heck of a muse that bit you to write this :D

i may or may not make a drawing to this- with you're permission of course ouo"
i'll credit you and everything :la:
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Please do!!! Show it to me when you finish it! :)
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DRA3X Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Student General Artist
alrightyy!! it won't take long ;)
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narutogirl132 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i finished it, i just can't post it yet so look forward to it!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
OKAY YAY! MAKE SURE YOU NOTE ME SO I DON'T MISS IT! ;)
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:iconopenskyline:
openskyline Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
whatever it is I wanna see it too :D
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:iconnarutogirl132:
narutogirl132 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
will do! i actually really like it :)
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FruitnCreme Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Student Digital Artist
beautiful!! :D
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU!!!
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FruitnCreme Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Student Digital Artist
yaahhhh!!!!:tribblela: 
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alparsln Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014
Don't change it. The way it is is truly amazing
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