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When you said
you needed space,
you meant more
between your fingers,
so you could hold
someone else's hand.
I am not sure if this one is up to par, it might need some rethinking. Feedback please and thank you? :heart:

OH AND ALSO CAN SOMEONE SUGGEST A BETTER TITLE PLEASE!!!
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NutmegRufRuf Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014
My gosh this is so beautiful!!!!!!!!! 

It's crazy how reading one poem, with such strong words, can cause someone to cry. 

Amazing, amazing, amazing, job. 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
AW YOU ARE SO BEAUTIFUL THOUGH. THANKS QT. :HEART:
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NutmegRufRuf Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Oh! Heart Heart thank you so much!!!!!! Hug Hug Hug 
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Il-Spun-II Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2014
what do you think of: 
"When you said
you needed space,
you meant more
than the distance
between our fingers,
so that you could hold
someone else's hand."

not too far off. 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hmmm I do like it, maybe instead change it to "you meant more distance between our fingers?"
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Il-Spun-II Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014
"When you said
you needed space,
you meant more
than our width
between your fingers,
so you could hold
someone else's hand."

i like this a bit, woulda added an extra line to finish the thought :)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ohhh okay! I will consider editing! :D I feel as though the way I wrote it gives off the idea of holding hands though? maybe not... what do you think?
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SurvivingExtinction Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh man, that is so sweet. It's simply put together but it works wonderfully. I'd say it fits better than a glove would, but gloves aren't sweet. Maybe one steeped in honey? XP
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahhaha OH MY YES. :heart: Glad you enjoyed~
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SurvivingExtinction Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha. Of course I did. Your poems are amazing!  :D
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