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Your tangled up soul
has taken a toll,
Hiding dark and deep
the secrets you keep

The tears you have shed
from thoughts in your head,
Dear they were all fiction:
a made up addiction

I want you to know
I see through the show,
I know that your eyes
tell genuine lies

I watch as you feign
as you’re still in pain,
And my soul will be too
until I have saved you
I want to save you.

UPDATE: Edited some punctuation, and divided the stanzas up! What do you think?
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:iconpunzie-the-princess:
Punzie-the-princess Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beautiful!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS!!!<33
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Emo-tion-Emilie-fied Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Student Writer
I FREAKING love this so much! the rhymes are perfect and I've felt this same way for 5 years. *claps*
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you so so much dearie! :)
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:iconbloodsuckerprincess0:
okay...am I dreaming? this is amazing and...wow.  im speechless
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:iconnotyrgrl:
Notyrgrl Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2014  Student Writer
I'm going through my momentary phase of insanity and your words just hypnotize me. It's brilliantly written. 
I love the last stanza . It's perfect! 
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you so much sunshine! I love your icon so <3
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:iconmiahoran14:
MiaHoran14 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014
Truly and amazingly talented writer. Very well written.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw no you are too sweet! I'm just trying to change the world in my own little way. XD
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:iconmiahoran14:
MiaHoran14 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014
Haha I love it, keep doing what ur doing!
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r0binVI Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
still sitting here at 2:18am clicking through ur gallery lol... u have a way of making me relate to ur stuff

have a weird urge to tell the narrator of ur poem that is probably no use, though o_O
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha, yeah. :/ But who knows, sometimes you can be surpised. AND AW YOU ARE SO SWEET!!! :heart:
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:iconotherland78:
otherland78 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014
maybe your nice poetry helps with that ;-)
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I HOPE SO! :O
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:icontraumatizedcookies:
TraumatizedCookies Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Student Digital Artist
'Genuine lies' Oh my god your poems are amazing.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha thank you!! <3
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openskyline Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Tangled up souls from Tangled Tales, 
lovely. 
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha ;P
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TwiHungerCity17 Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aghhhh, I love this!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS :)
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well done
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU!!! :)
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So welcome!
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:iconomarius99:
Omarius99 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
The emotion and conviction this poem presents is very impressive. 
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awwww thanks! <3
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Omarius99 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
:) :)
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ObsessivelyBlonde Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You've captured perfectly a certain essence. Best friend of a suicidal. Lover of an anorexic. Crush on an abused person. Any way you look at it, people in pain can relate. Good job on this one.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Glad you understood and could relate! :)
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ObsessivelyBlonde Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No, thank YOU for writing it!!!
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lunarosehitachiin Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my god this is what my character David feels about his crush (and later boyfriend/husband) Jayy during one of my stories!! That's just awesome!! :clap: 

The characters I'm talking about are in a series I'm working on. I only have 2 of 6 stories up, but the rest are started.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Woah what a coincidence! Super cool you can relate! :)
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lunarosehitachiin Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's crazy, but so freaking awesome and also really sweet because this describes EXACTLY what David feels about Jayy during his darkened days...
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:iconfeatherling:
featherling Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Student Writer
This is downright amazing.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awwww, thank you so much! :D Glad you think so!
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shep4life Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
But you’re still in pain
And my soul will be too
Until I have saved you


That's dedication 
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) right back at ya
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A-Glass-Brightly Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013  Professional Photographer
So sad and serious, but well-handled in poetic form.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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A-Glass-Brightly Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
You're welcome! :lol:
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CIChantea Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
if i'd let you. wheni don't trust, it'll be a rather hard thing to accomplish. but the person being spoken to could easily be me.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So glad you understand it! :)
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:iconcichantea:
CIChantea Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yeah, it's not hard for me to... a good bit of my poetry reflects that...
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bridgetbright Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I love this! This describes perfectly what I've experienced with some people in my life. 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! Glad you can relate and understand! :)
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HikariNoKunshu Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Truly marvelous, this pretty much talks about everybody, everybody often keeps things for themselves and lie, sometimes only to others but often they also lie to themselves, this one makes my heart ache in particular, because somebody really dear to me is doing this and as much as i'd wish to help her she doesn't let me help her, with this you really made my emotion go awry, and this is what should always happen with poetry. you did a really good job on this one.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I thought this one was very universal, as it can apply as much or as little as one wants it to! :)
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giffordm Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013
i really like this
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! 
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hinata8D Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
this pretty much sums up my love life!! i always go for the damaged. 
But on another note, i love this! 
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