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Your tangled up soul
has taken a toll,
Hiding dark and deep
the secrets you keep

The tears you have shed
from thoughts in your head,
Dear they were all fiction:
a made up addiction

I want you to know
I see through the show,
I know that your eyes
tell genuine lies

I watch as you feign
as you’re still in pain,
And my soul will be too
until I have saved you
I want to save you.

UPDATE: Edited some punctuation, and divided the stanzas up! What do you think?
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:iconmiahoran14:
MiaHoran14 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  New member
Truly and amazingly talented writer. Very well written.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw no you are too sweet! I'm just trying to change the world in my own little way. XD
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:iconmiahoran14:
MiaHoran14 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  New member
Haha I love it, keep doing what ur doing!
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r0binVI Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
still sitting here at 2:18am clicking through ur gallery lol... u have a way of making me relate to ur stuff

have a weird urge to tell the narrator of ur poem that is probably no use, though o_O
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha, yeah. :/ But who knows, sometimes you can be surpised. AND AW YOU ARE SO SWEET!!! :heart:
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otherland78 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014
maybe your nice poetry helps with that ;-)
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I HOPE SO! :O
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TraumatizedCookies Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Student Digital Artist
'Genuine lies' Oh my god your poems are amazing.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha thank you!! <3
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openskyline Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Tangled up souls from Tangled Tales, 
lovely. 
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