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Your tangled up soul
has taken a toll,
Hiding dark and deep
the secrets you keep

The tears you have shed
from thoughts in your head,
Dear they were all fiction:
a made up addiction

I want you to know
I see through the show,
I know that your eyes
tell genuine lies

I watch as you feign
as you’re still in pain,
And my soul will be too
until I have saved you
I want to save you.

UPDATE: Edited some punctuation, and divided the stanzas up! What do you think?
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Emo-tion-Emilie-fied Featured By Owner 4 days ago  Student Writer
I FREAKING love this so much! the rhymes are perfect and I've felt this same way for 5 years. *claps*
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner 19 hours ago  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you so so much dearie! :)
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bloodsuckerprincess0 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2014  New member
okay...am I dreaming? this is amazing and...wow.  im speechless
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Notyrgrl Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2014  Student Writer
I'm going through my momentary phase of insanity and your words just hypnotize me. It's brilliantly written. 
I love the last stanza . It's perfect! 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you so much sunshine! I love your icon so <3
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MiaHoran14 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  New member
Truly and amazingly talented writer. Very well written.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw no you are too sweet! I'm just trying to change the world in my own little way. XD
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MiaHoran14 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  New member
Haha I love it, keep doing what ur doing!
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r0binVI Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
still sitting here at 2:18am clicking through ur gallery lol... u have a way of making me relate to ur stuff

have a weird urge to tell the narrator of ur poem that is probably no use, though o_O
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha, yeah. :/ But who knows, sometimes you can be surpised. AND AW YOU ARE SO SWEET!!! :heart:
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