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You stand here in
this somber place,
the rain pelting
your sorrowed face

I think about
how you do feign,
as your salty tears
mix with the rain

And as your lips do drip
with bitter sorrow,
I yearn for you
a better tomorrow
Is it rain, or is it pain?
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:iconkatanaongaku:
KatanaOngaku Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
at least the world is fresher, cleaner, brighter, after it rains
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
aww yes! I love rain! :)
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KatanaOngaku Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
I only like it when its not getting me wet when I don't want to be wet XPXD
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AppleCottie Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2015
Rain is awesome it wipes ur tears away...
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOUUUU. 
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Kaeptndotterbart Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
so the feign does call him/her a liar ? or am i just too bad in english terms
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
feign is more pretend! So almost,, hiding feelings! 
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Kaeptndotterbart Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
thx i knew the word but still ^^
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FindingWhatsLost Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2015  Hobbyist
You have a knack for writing very descriptive poetry.  Whenever I read your works I am overcome with such vivid and emotional images.  This poem is no different.  I can see the raindrops gathering and running mixing with tears of sorrow.  But like the last two lines..."I yearn for you a better tomorrow"...the sun will eventually emerge from behind the thunderheads and shine it's light once again on the world. Beautiful work.   
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thank you! And you have a knack for being oh so kind! :)
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PennedinWhite Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
A wonderfully written piece. Thanks for sharing! :heart: 
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank YOU for reading. :heart:
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PennedinWhite Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! :heart:
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Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
We are all one vast ocean of tears...
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:iconpennedinwhite:
PennedinWhite Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Well said!
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Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
But many of those drops are tears of laughter and love!
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:iconpennedinwhite:
PennedinWhite Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Quite true! :heart:
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:iconchaosfive-55:
Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
:aww:
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Maybe sometimes we are...
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Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug: But so many of those drops are tears of joy!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Yes!!!!  :hug:
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Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
:huggle:
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BloodxInkedxPen Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Rain always seems to mirror sorrow and pain, but in a way it's quite peaceful. C: I loved it! Great job!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU :D
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BloodxInkedxPen Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
C:
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CremePuffMarshmallow Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2015  Student General Artist
This kind of makes me feel better than I do right now, strangely enough.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Aw yaya! That makes me SO happy! :)
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CremePuffMarshmallow Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2015  Student General Artist
I'm glad it does, good work as always :D
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dawn-giant-dragon Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015  Student General Artist
hmm...grate minds think alike :D
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
<333
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dawn-giant-dragon Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2015  Student General Artist
you've seen my "thunderstorms" right?
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Ummm... I don't know >.< Link me!
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dawn-giant-dragon Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2015  Student General Artist
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Aw that is so cute!!!!
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dawn-giant-dragon Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2015  Student General Artist
:rofl: how is that cute?
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know, just how it is written. >.<
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wolfloversas Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Maybe a bit of both... Sometimes it's easiest to fake it until you can secretly let it all out. :meow: At least, that's what I take from this. Good work as usual. :D
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! This is actually an older one I edited!! :) 
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wolfloversas Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
xD I noticed that, seeing 2013 in the date and so many comments. But I thought what the heck, it was in my inobx so why not read and comment? :D
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
It is always appreciated!!! ^.^
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Nortstar Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2015
it is really nice :)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much!!! <33
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Nortstar Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2015
you are welcome :hug:
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Redsterfish Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2015  Professional General Artist
...and the argus has practised compassion...Shadow Raptor emote static 
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
>.<
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Redsterfish Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2015  Professional General Artist
:D
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ShuruiKamiMoe Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2015  Student General Artist
No matter how much it rains it can never hid ones tears. But as time goes on things will get better very emotional and very pleasing. Nice work.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
So true! Thank you darlin'.
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ShuruiKamiMoe Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2015  Student General Artist
Welcome :).
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KingfisherSilentArmy Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very emotional, I like it. :)
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