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I told you to stop
spewing pretty metaphors at me,
for with each elaborate comparison,
I feel a bit more
detached from this world

And maybe I don’t feel so strong at the moment,
but would you be
if you felt like the entire universe
was resting upon your shoulders,
and someone was just there saying:
But you’re stronger than the powerful beats
of a butterfly’s wings


And maybe I do need more confidence,
but would you exuberate it
when the part you hated most about yourself
were the freckles that have speckled your face for years,
and someone was just there muttering:
They’re not flaws,
but rather stars that form constellations


Yes, I can’t help but hate
all those unrealistic metaphors
you choose to pelt at me when I’m low,
yet the irony is,
I know that those beautiful words
are realistic in your eyes,
So I can’t hate you.
This is the poem for people that tell you something you don't believe. This is the poem for the elaborate metaphors that we all hate, yet all love at the same time. This is the poem to tell you, the metaphors are probably true about you. If you think I'm writing about you, I probably am. Enjoy everyone! :heart:

Ps: Title yay or nay? I CHANGED IT. 
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RogueNova Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2014  Hobbyist
I don't get it. should I compliment you or not? I wouldn't say it if I didn't mean it. But I can't if I'm being mean by saying it.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's more about enjoying someone's flaws rather than pretending they aren't. I guess, embracing people for who they are. :)
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RogueNova Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2014  Hobbyist
I understand that. But if someone perceives something you love about them as a serious flaw, do you compliment them on it? or would that be rude?
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Compliment them. Make them love their imperfections. Just be honest, don't make people out to be physically perfect, but rather, perfect in their being. In the way they laugh, or talk, or cry.
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Kayanya Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Some people just don't understand that one clichéd metaphor will never be enough to erase years of "you'll never be pretty", nor that not everyone wants to live up to their clichés. So, thank you.
Though I like the freckles as constellations metaphor and use things like this in writing, just because I love stars and space (and learned to like my freckles). 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly! ^.^
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chihuahua4446 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014
I love all your work that I've read so far, but this one has got to be my personal favorite. It just speaks to me. You have a true gift with words :)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aweee thank you so so much! It has a very honest flow to it! Everyone, I'm sure, has felt something similar to this!
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FunkForTheFunky Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014
Another excellent and immaculately constructed piece of poetry. This is as good as the last piece I read by you (introvert) in that the best pieces today draw effortlessly from things we take for granted in literature like elaborate metaphors and tie them to life. Powerful. You are a fantastic writer and I can't wait to see more like this.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thank you so much dear! Your kind words inspire me to write more and more! Stay wonderful!!! :hug:
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FunkForTheFunky Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014
I try. You're welcome.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Student Writer
HELL YEAH

the truth to this is almost unbearably accurate, and it hurts in the best possible way.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Heehee thank you for reading!!! Glad you understood! Stay rad! :)
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Student Writer
You too! ;)
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Bludragon123 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful :) I love that last line!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU SO MUCH SWEETIE! :heart:
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Bludragon123 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome :)
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BloodTalonHero Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
So you like realistic compliments? ;)

Nice poem though. 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Gah I don't know I just feel so awkward accepting compliments. >.< THANK YOU DEAR STAY WONDERFUL! :)
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r0binVI Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
love the title (its what made me look at it, sooo~)

u know what else sucks about those metaphors, its like "ure beautiful, ur flaws r in ur head, u have no right to suffer"
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahha, exactly! Compliments just make me feel awkward in general. XD
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Lost-Summer-Haze Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
I love this. I've felt this way before many times, and it's written very well.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU SO SO MUCH! :D 
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MegzLuvsYouAll Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
Beautiful poem. I like the message and the title. I especially like the ending stanza. :clap: Beautiful work!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thank you so much! Stay wonderful! ^.^
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MegzLuvsYouAll Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
Your welcome, and you too! :D
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Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:clap:
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:aww:
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InverseMemory Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Student Artist
I just love the raw style in which this is written, it makes it all feel much more real, and it acts as a direct contrast to your subject matter (which I also love).  As for the title, I think it's beautiful - it adds a whole new layer to the poem without beating you over the head with self-deprication.  Props!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
OH MY THANK YOU!!! You are wonderful! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, it means so much to me! :heart:
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is lovely - I love the words they say, but I was dislike when someone has to form them into a compliment. It's overdoing an opinion. Sure, it be flattering - but one does easily tire of them.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I totally understand! But sometimes, the words to tug at my heart string!
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dead-rotten-bitch Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I don't believe them nor will I ever :P
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I feel you! :/ But maybe, we need to accept them with people we trust.
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dead-rotten-bitch Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Maybe one day when I actually trust people…:shrug:
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I do understand. :/ But I have learned to trust my gut more. :)
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wednesdaymourning6 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
YAY for the title! It intrigued me and already made perfect sense before I even read the poem! Then you twisted the poetic nature of metaphors inside out and revealed a deeper, rawer meaning to it. It's outside the box, and I love it! Great job!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww thank you so much!! Glad you enjoyed! ^.^
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puddlethecat Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My new favorite <3
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe, so so sweet! ^.^
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puddlethecat Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
your very good at words darling
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thank you! :heart: You are so sweet!
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puddlethecat Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime, anytime :3
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Angel-Tsuki Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
title: YAY!
Oh I would personally love if a dude told me these beautiful metaphors. Poets are naturally attractive you see. But since I haven't really experienced it, I cannot speculate or comment. But yes, I'd enjoy them. Though I don't completely disagree with your perspective. 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahha, I think so too, it would be nice to have something so beautiful told to me. I have not really experienced it either, just creating a fictitious scenario,,, and I think everyone can relate to the idea of being told things about themselves that they do not believe. ^.^
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Angel-Tsuki Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
yeah true that. And you've delivered this idea very well :iconkakathumbsupplz:
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WasahbiArt Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Title: YAY!!!
This is a great poem...I should read this every now and then xP
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahha, thank you! So glad to hear! :heart:
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WasahbiArt Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Not a problem!!! ^w^
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