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I told you to stop
spewing pretty metaphors at me,
for with each elaborate comparison,
I feel a bit more
detached from this world

And maybe I don’t feel so strong at the moment,
but would you be
if you felt like the entire universe
was resting upon your shoulders,
and someone was just there saying:
But you’re stronger than the powerful beats
of a butterfly’s wings


And maybe I do need more confidence,
but would you exuberate it
when the part you hated most about yourself
were the freckles that have speckled your face for years,
and someone was just there muttering:
They’re not flaws,
but rather stars that form constellations


Yes, I can’t help but hate
all those unrealistic metaphors
you choose to pelt at me when I’m low,
yet the irony is,
I know that those beautiful words
are realistic in your eyes,
So I can’t hate you.
This is the poem for people that tell you something you don't believe. This is the poem for the elaborate metaphors that we all hate, yet all love at the same time. This is the poem to tell you, the metaphors are probably true about you. If you think I'm writing about you, I probably am. Enjoy everyone! :heart:

Ps: Title yay or nay? I CHANGED IT. 
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chihuahua4446 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014
I love all your work that I've read so far, but this one has got to be my personal favorite. It just speaks to me. You have a true gift with words :)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aweee thank you so so much! It has a very honest flow to it! Everyone, I'm sure, has felt something similar to this!
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FunkForTheFunky Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014
Another excellent and immaculately constructed piece of poetry. This is as good as the last piece I read by you (introvert) in that the best pieces today draw effortlessly from things we take for granted in literature like elaborate metaphors and tie them to life. Powerful. You are a fantastic writer and I can't wait to see more like this.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thank you so much dear! Your kind words inspire me to write more and more! Stay wonderful!!! :hug:
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FunkForTheFunky Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014
I try. You're welcome.
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Student Writer
HELL YEAH

the truth to this is almost unbearably accurate, and it hurts in the best possible way.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Heehee thank you for reading!!! Glad you understood! Stay rad! :)
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Student Writer
You too! ;)
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Bludragon123 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful :) I love that last line!
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU SO MUCH SWEETIE! :heart:
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