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I am the sun
and you
are the moon:
my tidal-wave
tears
are controlled
by you

So when it's 2am
in the middle of the night,
I know why
I can't
sleep tight.
My thoughts for the night. Feedback appreciated. TITLE SUGGESTIONS TOO?
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:iconmusicandartrocker:
MusicAndArtRocker Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Rhymey...in a good way.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU! I thought it flowed pretty well.
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:iconnortstar:
Nortstar Featured By Owner May 31, 2014
it is really interesting ^^
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yayay! Glad to hear!
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Nortstar Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014
you are welcome :hug:
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:iconazurenebulae:
AzureNebulae Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is fantastic! :iconyay-plz: Just what I needed to read. :D <3
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww <3 GLAD TO HEAR!
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AzureNebulae Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:la: <3
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primalfuryan Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Professional General Artist
:iconaparazita-r::iconsquirrelflight-77:Your artwork has been graciously featured in Titans Genuine Literature feature ,stay wonderful!Hug:iconsquirrelflight-77::iconaparazita-r:
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ohh, THANK YOU! :)
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:iconmoonlightprincess134:
Moonlightprincess134 Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Student
very nice
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU!!! :)
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:iconmoonlightprincess134:
Moonlightprincess134 Featured By Owner May 15, 2014  Student
your welcome
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zaparagrl Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
very good. and i relate, too. You know those nights where you are too tired to sleep? That is me and i know my reason why, too. I love your words and you say that better than I would have thought to. I will put a poem up soon and i would appreciate your input.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU! And yes please, send it to me!!
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:iconzaparagrl:
zaparagrl Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
sure no problem. btw i like your user name too.
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:iconoldtiny:
oldtiny Featured By Owner May 11, 2014
nice , i couldnt pass it, but my insomniac has another reason
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oooh, insomnia can be caused by many things, it seems.
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:iconxxrockfiendxx:
XxRockFiendxX Featured By Owner May 11, 2014
i dunno why but I'm stricken by the power the moon possesses here...it's usually always the other way it seems...
i like =)
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Gahhh thank you so much!! :)
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XxRockFiendxX Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014
;)
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:iconsobhanmp:
sobhanmp Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i think i can't sleep would be nicer :/ IMAO
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Okay!!! Thanks!!
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:icontheriverstudio:
TheRiverStudio Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
If only I could be so grossly incandescent.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hhahaha ;P
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:iconimaplatypusguy:
ImAPlatypusGuy Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
at least you have a valid reason why you can't sleep at night.I sleep at 4 am for fun.and maybe because of art.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha well maybe for art isn't too bad! ;)
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ImAPlatypusGuy Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks.gotta go,bye!
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:iconhydrangela:
hydrangela Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is perfect on so many levels <3
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thank you so much! ;D
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:iconmolledusi:
molledusi Featured By Owner May 10, 2014
love it!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS!! <3
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:iconmolledusi:
molledusi Featured By Owner May 10, 2014
no probs
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Noxe-ApplePi Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Student General Artist
Beautiful :D I love how you expressed the situation and also implied far more for the reader to expand upon in their thoughts, all in a few simple phrases!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thank you so much! Thanks for reading and commenting! :)
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:iconbl8antband:
BL8antBand Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Title idea, "Bon Bonfire."
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not sure I understand.. >.< hahha
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:iconbl8antband:
BL8antBand Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Maybe it is too clever?  I over think things sometimes.  A "bon bon" is a chocolate.  A bonfire is a raging roaring fire, uncontrollable sometimes.  Bon Bon bonfire.  Or shortened up to, "Bon Bonfire."
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I guess I'm just confused about the relation to the poem, haha. XD
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:iconbl8antband:
BL8antBand Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Oh!  Ok, the poem meant to me the dark cavernous desires inside one's soul as the passionate relation to chocolate, lit and inspired by the moon (at 2am) hiding the raging fire that truly burns inside and roars as does the sun.  Can't get to sleep with all those things going on, eh?  My experience to relate to this is when the family sits outside at night, we get a fire going, and someone always is roasting, "Smores" at the campfire.  Less passionate, but of family spirit nonetheless.  Thanks for this inspirational poem.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ohhh okay, I SEE! Quite deep, haha. BUT THANK YOU! :hug:
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:iconbl8antband:
BL8antBand Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Fire represents sun.  Chocolate represents the dark.  There is a lot to this simple title, yes?
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hellguard777 Featured By Owner May 10, 2014
I love it how all of a sudden this poem gets flooded by comments of "philosophical" people who understand and connect with the poem... Lol. This thing doesn't make sense. Most of these comments don't agree on the meaning.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahah well, poetry is so fantastic because it can be interpreted however someone wants! It makes sense in a different way to eaxh individual! I'm sorry you couldn't make sense out of it, though. :/ My meaning behind the poem was that by saying I am the sun, and you are the moon, we are related, almost connected, as the sun and moon are. The moon controls the tides, thus controlling my "tidal-wave tears." lastly, the tears/thoughts keep me up, since the moon is out at night. :) Hopefully that makes more sense! Have a fantastic day!
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FiestaFacelift Featured By Owner May 10, 2014
this is by far my fav poem about menstruation
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war4yourmind Featured By Owner May 10, 2014
Hahahahaha, probably a side-effect not intended by the author*

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* May cause vomiting, constipation, headaches, nausea, muscle ache.
* If symptoms persist, see a physician.
* Do not exceed the prescribed daily intake.

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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha, I don't know if I quite understand... Care to explain? :)
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FiestaFacelift Featured By Owner May 11, 2014
It was a joke since some people believe there's a link between the lunar cycle and menstruation.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ohhh haha! I've never heard that! XD
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CarrierNovels Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is fantastic and very powerful! I totally love it. You asked for feedback, so I have two thoughts:

1) The moon does indeed control the tides and we know that this is because of the gravitational relationship between the moon and the Earth (since the tides are located on Earth). So, perhaps it would be an even more powerful metaphor if you were to say "I am the Earth and you are the moon" rather than "I am the sun?" Just a thought.

2) I'd love to invite you to join a group that I founded just for writers! It's LiteratureArtists and you're more than welcome to send a request if you are interested!

Be blessed! :happybounce:
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