very good. and i relate, too. You know those nights where you are too tired to sleep? That is me and i know my reason why, too. I love your words and you say that better than I would have thought to. I will put a poem up soon and i would appreciate your input.
Oh! Ok, the poem meant to me the dark cavernous desires inside one's soul as the passionate relation to chocolate, lit and inspired by the moon (at 2am) hiding the raging fire that truly burns inside and roars as does the sun. Can't get to sleep with all those things going on, eh? My experience to relate to this is when the family sits outside at night, we get a fire going, and someone always is roasting, "Smores" at the campfire. Less passionate, but of family spirit nonetheless. Thanks for this inspirational poem.
I love it how all of a sudden this poem gets flooded by comments of "philosophical" people who understand and connect with the poem... Lol. This thing doesn't make sense. Most of these comments don't agree on the meaning.
Hahah well, poetry is so fantastic because it can be interpreted however someone wants! It makes sense in a different way to eaxh individual! I'm sorry you couldn't make sense out of it, though. :/ My meaning behind the poem was that by saying I am the sun, and you are the moon, we are related, almost connected, as the sun and moon are. The moon controls the tides, thus controlling my "tidal-wave tears." lastly, the tears/thoughts keep me up, since the moon is out at night. Hopefully that makes more sense! Have a fantastic day!
This is fantastic and very powerful! I totally love it. You asked for feedback, so I have two thoughts:
1) The moon does indeed control the tides and we know that this is because of the gravitational relationship between the moon and the Earth (since the tides are located on Earth). So, perhaps it would be an even more powerful metaphor if you were to say "I am the Earth and you are the moon" rather than "I am the sun?" Just a thought.
2) I'd love to invite you to join a group that I founded just for writers! It's LiteratureArtists and you're more than welcome to send a request if you are interested!