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I built a wall
around my heart,
and swore
I'd never let you in

but the more time that
I spend with you,
allows the beats
to crack
the cement.
But isn't it better to be careful than not?
PS: Title okay?
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:iconkatanaongaku:
KatanaOngaku Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
YUP
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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:iconkatanaongaku:
KatanaOngaku Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Tackling hug 
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:icondanqtheman:
danqtheman Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2014
That describes me completely.  Also great use of poetry.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS QT! I am the exact same way, though. Protective.
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NutmegRufRuf Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014
The title is outstanding! 

'Cement Heart' will be ringing in my ears all day. 

Fantastic job. 
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw you are so so sweet! Stay awesome! Really. Your comments and favess mean the world! :)
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NutmegRufRuf Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Thank You! 
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AnnaBellLee17 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Writer
yes, it okay to be careful. i understand where you are coming from and the title seems fine to me.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww thank you dear! :D Stay great.
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:iconannabelllee17:
AnnaBellLee17 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Student Writer
you're welcome.
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:iconnortstar:
Nortstar Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014
it is so pretty :)
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
YOU are so pretty, stay sweet! :D
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:iconnortstar:
Nortstar Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
thank you :hug:
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:iconteamviola:
teamviola Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014
This is so cute :3
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thank you dear! :)
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Sil3nTActi0N Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014
Love it!! When you fall for that bad boy you know is trouble. Haha. Happened to me once. Been carful since. Ammmaaaazing poem. Im sure alot of us can relate. :)
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the lovely feedback! So glad you think so! :)
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:iconl0ne-w0lf:
L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014
This is happening to me right now. And of course, it's always better to be careful!

This is fantastic. I absolutely love it.

:heart:
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww thank you so much! I think everyone can relate to some degree. ^.^
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:iconl0ne-w0lf:
L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
You're very welcome. :heart:
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:iconforreal21:
forreal21 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014
Mehh, very boring and stale. to me, atleast.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Mkay! Thanks for the feedback! I would agree it might not have that WOW factor!
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:iconmidnight-robotnik:
Midnight-Robotnik Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014
Beautiful.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's you! ;D
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Suichu-Kokyu Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Well done T-T
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS! :huggle:
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
I agree that we should be careful. But we can't be paranoid, right?
(The title is just fine)
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yep yep! And that is the tricky part!! >.<
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Indeed. We have to find the balance between trust and caution.
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josewtf01 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Student Writer
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I am confused....
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Rema-Alkhany Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014
Because the rigors of your soul was very strange ...
************
very nice.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU!! :hug:
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:iconhobbywriter:
HobbyWriter Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes, I guess it is better to have love and lost than never having loved at all.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww yes yes! :) <3
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HobbyWriter Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Coming from a guy that doesn't know the first thing about love.
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha I know pretty much nothing too, it's fine.
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:iconhobbywriter:
HobbyWriter Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good to know we're not the only one.
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FelixTheKKat Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Its wonderful!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS!!! :D
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FelixTheKKat Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course !
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TwiHungerCity17 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love this. :)
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love YOU.
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:icontwihungercity17:
TwiHungerCity17 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aw thank you lol XD
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Perfect title..I have felt this and written about this as well...good job!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww thanks!! And you should link me to what you have written if it is posted!
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome!

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These have parts of that idea in them and there is another one but I can't find it lol

Hope this doesn't overwhelm you :)
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you! And no, it's fine! :D
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) Thank you for taking the time
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