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I think I was your drink of fine wine,
only used when needed from time to time
I'd get you tipsy, as stars collide
Your drunk, slurred words
blending in with mine
(I couldn't even comprehend
when you said it wouldn't happen again)

I think I was your cigarette break
when anxiety filled,
from me, you'd take
One puff here, and one puff there
(I could barely hear
when you said, "I'm sorry, dear")

I think I was your line of cocaine,
thinking I'd be there to ease your pain
I'd bring you higher,
head suspended in clouds
(So I knew it was fake,
when you said, "It was my mistake")

I think I was your bad habit,
and ignorantly, you were mine
You continue to relapse, my dear
But rest assured:

I won't this time.
Some people are just self-destructive for eachother. Some of us just use one another. Started jotting this down while in psychology class. Not sure if it came out right? Feedback please! :)
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wolfloversas Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it. :heart:
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks dear!! :heart:
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wolfloversas Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Keep writing. :)
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RayTheFilipinoGwaiLo Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have a bad habit of taking the last Rice Krispy in the box without asking anyone.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well that is a bit more low key. Although still painful to those who wanted that last treat! Stay awesome, sunshine! (and maybe give half of the treat to a sibling or friend)
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Yatzstar Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
I've got a bad habit. It's ridiculously childish, and I definitely shouldn't still be doing it in high school, and I don't know when I'll stop. But this has given me the tiniest bit of hope.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww I hope you figure out how to deal with any bad habit! If you need someone to talk to, NOTE ME. :heart: Stay rad!
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otherland78 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014
i always wonder what you experienced so that you know about those things to write them down .......soetimes i feel like a little kid believing in santa claus
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
To be honest, this is just a fictional piece, haha. :)
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MaryBalderrama Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014   General Artist
Very well written and I love the ending! :)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! So glad to hear! :hug:
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner May 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
love the rhyming you did in this. The last stanza is my favorite. So strong.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner May 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU SO MUCH!! :')
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner May 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome. (:
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AnnaBellLee17 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Student Writer
this is when i lose my trust in people.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
</3
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jamyjamj Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Student Writer
wow.  There are no words I can express that would give justice to how beautifully written and how powerful this poem is!
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thank you! Glad you enjoyed it! :)
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TraumatizedCookies Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
WHY ARE YOU SO GOOD. Ugh. I love you. 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha thank you! :) But I assure you I hahe lots to learn! 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely brilliant! The rhyme is great, the rhythm is fantastic and the content is wonderful. :D
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:icontangled-tales:
Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Gahhhhh, THANK YOU SO MUCH! <3
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Student General Artist
Some people are just destructive.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes :/
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HikariTetsuya Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Good work ~ :D
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS :) :hug:
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chelsearabbers Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
This is great!! I love the way it flowed so nicely
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thanks! :)
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chelsearabbers Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome :)
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Yuesumi Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow this is so beautiful. I truly love the last part ('I think I was your bad habit, and ignorantly, you were mine...') because it's so deep.
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yayaya! Glad to hear! :D Endings are always my fave to write!
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noelmaghathephoto Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014   Photographer
Crying because your work is too amazing. Neko Emoji-14 (Cry) [V1] Neko Emoji-17 (Happy) [V1] [EXO] Luhan Emoticon Mabelpines Llama Emoji-66 (Orly) [V3] Neko Emoji-27 (Being kawaii) [V2] 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
D'awww thanks so much! :hug: BUT YOUR WORK IS AMAZING SO! <33
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noelmaghathephoto Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014   Photographer
Love thank you!!!!!:happybounce: Heart 
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FruitnCreme Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Student Digital Artist
so good ;-;
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww thanks! :)
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ShermanSquiggly Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014   General Artist
This is wonderful, beautifully worded and carrying an interesting meaning. I've never seen unhealthy relationships like this compared to habits, but it rings completely true!
Haha, if my psych teacher caught me writing poetry in his class, he'd probably stop his lesson and make me read it aloud ;p
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahah, mine just lectures all class, so I usually write, doodle, or am spaced out! ;P
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ShermanSquiggly Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014   General Artist
Haha yeah, I have teachers like that, too :P Last week, my Latin teacher realized all I've done in the past, like 7 or 8 months I've had his class, was sit in the back and draw. Like I have my colored pencils out on the desk in front of me and once I brought in my watercolors and he completely had no idea xD
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Watercolors? :O THAT IS AWESOME!!
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ShermanSquiggly Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014   General Artist
Hahaha it was fantastic XD Didn't last long cause I'm super paranoid about spilling, but it was great fun :P
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Yonderness Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazingly worded. The rhymes make it smooth to follow and your figurative language uses are great and original. I love the idea that more than one person can be the blame. Many poems only focus on one person. The whole poem is a lovely metaphor and very deep. 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahah thank you so much! :D I love when people talk about their interpretation, and am glad you enjoyed the netaphor! ;D
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Really deep. Well done :)
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! Glad you think so! :hug:
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
You're welcome :)
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Skimmer2222 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014
I absolutely love this! I couldn't have worded it better myself! Great job! :D
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU! :) So glad you enjoyed it!
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Arthur55623 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I got one thing to say to this beautiful work of art
*Slow clap*
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